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[Editor’s Note: We are grate­ful to Lee Martin’s arti­cle “Stu­art Dybek’s ‘Sun­day at the Zoo’: A Class in Nar­ra­tive Struc­ture,” an arti­cle that served as our own mod­el for the struc­ture of the nar­ra­tive analy­sis essay of short short fic­tion.]

 

A flash nar­ra­tive can be built around any idea, even some­thing as sim­ple as slic­ing car­rots. This devel­op­ment of a nar­ra­tive, com­plete with com­plex con­se­quences but with­out intense action, is accom­plished in “That Reminds Me” by Susan Jack­son Rodgers, pub­lished in Quick Fic­tion 11. As writ­ers, we can learn about the for­ma­tion of a nar­ra­tive through this unique exam­ple.

 

As the sto­ry opens, the nar­ra­tor cuts car­rots in her kitchen to pre­pare soup. But she is not real­ly think­ing about the phys­i­cal act of cut­ting car­rots, an activ­i­ty so rou­tine that it does not require any con­cen­tra­tion at all. Instead, her mind is left to wan­der, cre­ate links between her free-falling thoughts, and assign mean­ing to her mem­o­ries: “The car­rots are just the begin­ning.”

 

She is struck by the fact that she slices her car­rots on a diag­o­nal, which reminds her of her for­mer boyfriend who she taught to slice car­rots on the diag­o­nal too. So a sto­ry that starts from a sin­gle mun­dane act, with­out a cause-and-effect series of events, can blos­som into a nar­ra­tive.

 

The nar­ra­tor flows from one thought to the next in a stream-of-con­scious­ness style. Slic­ing car­rots leads to the narrator’s rela­tion­ship with Ger­ry, which leads to her rela­tion­ship with Rick and his rock­ing Chi­nese cleaver, which leads to Rick and Gerry’s friend­ship, which leads back to slic­ing car­rots. This for­ward momen­tum cre­ates a plot for the sto­ry. Because cut­ting car­rots is, of course, not an actu­al plot. But it’s also not what the sto­ry is real­ly about.

 

Despite the inevitable change with­in the narrator’s inti­mate rela­tion­ships, per­ma­nence is promised through the con­sis­tent­ly used diag­o­nal style of cut­ting car­rots: “there will always be a time when I will once again slice a car­rot, and you will come back to me.”
Rodgers uses the story’s nar­ra­tive struc­ture to devel­op the theme. The cir­cu­lar struc­ture, cre­at­ed by begin­ning and end­ing with the car­rots, emu­lates the cycli­cal but chang­ing nature of rela­tion­ships and life in gen­er­al, an idea cen­tral to the sto­ry. Also, the action under­neath the car­rot slic­ing, the inevitable demise of one inti­mate rela­tion­ship and the even­tu­al replace­ment with anoth­er, is also indica­tive of a cycle.

 

“That Reminds Me” is an espe­cial­ly inter­est­ing exam­ple of nar­ra­tive struc­ture because it employs the fol­low­ing tech­niques:

  • One lone action, seem­ing­ly with­out con­se­quence, can set off the cause-and-effect chain of events required for a nar­ra­tive.
  • The plot, which lies beneath the story’s out­ward action, is sup­plied through the narrator’s free asso­ci­a­tions.
  • The cir­cu­lar struc­ture of the nar­ra­tive sup­ports the story’s theme.

 

FF.Net Author’s Note

Indi­go Phoenix is a nov­el­ist for tweens, teens, and new adults. She mod­er­ates the Flash Dance and Tweens & Teens forums at Writ­ers’ Vil­lage Uni­ver­si­ty while pur­su­ing her MFA degree at Rose­mont Col­lege.

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